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22/9/2013

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WALT: extend sentences with adjectives, adverbs and phrases that tell where, when, what, who, how and why.

We made cake.

On Saturday afternoon, just before my friend Jane came round to play with me, my mum and I baked some fairy cake for us to share. By Jodie

Yesterday, when the sun just rose, my friends and I walked happily to the awesome Qing Dao YCIS to make some delicious brownies with Mrs. Ballantyne

By : Annie

On my birthday my family made a delicious, chocolate cake in my grandma’s house.

By: Kyu Won

On a Sunday morning we baked brownie cake at my friends house!

By : Lorijn

On Friday, a morning before Mrs.  Ballantyne’s  birthday, my friends and I made a delicious ice cream  cake at school for this afternoon’s party.

By : Albane

My mum and I woke up on a Saturday morning and the first thing we did was bake a huge chocolate cake for my lovely dad.                                                                                                     

BY : CHRISTOFFER

On Saturday afternoon, my friends happily made lots of delicious cake with yummy sweets under it for my mum’s fantastic birthday.

BY: MINJONG

On Sunday afternoon my mum and me joyfully made really yummy chocolate

cakes for my sister`s birthday party.

By: RACHEL

On September 1st, my family and I joyfully made gigantic, 22 cm cakes with lots of cream and chocolate to eat with my big, muscular friend, when he come to play.

By: David

10 Comments
freya
22/9/2013 11:40:04 pm

it sounds like all of you are enjoying making all your amazing treats!!!
i hope they were all yummy!!!

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lauren
22/9/2013 11:40:53 pm

all that food sounds delish was it all nice?

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pip pips
23/9/2013 12:09:03 am

i think it is great

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horridhaydn
23/9/2013 12:09:13 am

that looks like very good work

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Lu Laoshi
23/9/2013 12:40:19 pm

Wow~~
You guys used amazing adj to make your sentences more interesting!
很棒的英文句子, 我非常喜欢读你们写的!

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Mrs B
23/9/2013 12:50:46 pm

Thank you everyone for your comments. We didn't actually make cake. But we made long sentences about it!

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Marren
30/9/2013 12:26:03 pm

Hi I am Marren .I realy like your sentences. Do you like to live in china? :)

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Sam E at broadmeadow junior school
1/10/2013 11:44:29 pm

Hi! other there how are you! Thank you I have learnt something new from your video.There are 650 bones in yor body.

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Andile Broadmeadow
1/10/2013 11:44:41 pm

wow! you have learnt a lot well done keep it up

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Lollipop
1/10/2013 11:58:36 pm

I wish I was there because it sounds really fun! Did you have fun doing it?
:) :) :)

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